Jason grinned. “It had better bloody not be.”
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That actually made me laugh out loud :D Why does he have to be fictional? *sobs uncontrollably..* You make him so believable, and the last chapter is the cutest of all :) I guess I'd anticipated the ending from the beginning, but it was such an enjoyable read. It's probably the longest story I've read on fictionpress, so go you! (I normally can't even be bothered to proof-read my own super short chapters.) It was set at the perfect pace with just the right amout of funny and the right amount of love =D

At least Malcolm seemed to be buying it, he thought.

“Hopefully.” I smiled. Then amended it with another maybe. Jaz shook her head at me.
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This is just great XD
You make the characters sound so everyday and believable!

Allejandro? Are these people Hispanic? o_O

Anyway I am getting overly into this :D This is like a chick-lit that I've read, but I can't remember which one.. It's really really sweet =) (Sorry I keep saying the same thing over and over.. but it's true!)

I like the way you make this very light, it flows really well. Someone ought to make a film out of this! :)

This is getting all aww and fuzzy! Em does seem a bit overly obsessed with her dog.

Woohoo!! This is getting like a movie, and I mean that in a positive way!!

Aw this is getting soo sweet :) I've just voted in your favourite character poll thing.. Can't believe I'm the only that's voted for Jason haha, he's amazing!

Hahaha 'partner'.. how did you think of that xD?!
I love the way you're integrating humour into this whole thing, and it's clearer now what's going on (or so I think.. I think I know everything by the end of *every* chapter and you always prove me wrong). But anyway what I know so far has been a very clever plot!

Oh dear. There's even more to it than I thought :S This is so intriguing!!

Haha, this is funny =D Can't wait to see what's going to happen next!

Kind of fast, but super cute ending.

Love that Chase figured out that she likes Jason...and she kind of figured out she likes Jason. :) Hooray.

And they met Jason. Interesting exchanges. Very brotherly...and Jason-ly? :)Nicely done.

Cute sibling banter. Huzzah.

Shouldn't they be mad at Jaz to? Since she was the one Jason was originally sent to protect,and he kinda failed with protecting Em? (Though he made a valient effort and I love him for it). Especially since I would guess it made the news and they heard from their parents? Does the one detective brother maybe know Jason. Ahh so many questions...