Hello!

I was browsing through the completed stories on FP when I came across this one. It's cute! My big pet peeve is grammar errors, and there were almost none in this story. My one comment would be that I was sometimes confused about who was talking: for instance, during the line "Are you into this guy or not..." You could use 'so-and-so said' a little more to clarify the dialogue. I know you wouldn't want to overuse it, but every once in a while it might help.

Thanks for writing, and good luck with your other projects!

julia1984