Your use of mathematical diction, particularly 'parallel' and 'intersect,' definitely helped to enhance the philosophical nature of this opening stanza.

"Do you breathe inward or out?" This question is so gentle and profound. I love the way in which you connected sleep to dreams. Many use their imagination as a means of 'escape' from their horrific reality.

Creative poem. :)

Love these lines, "Legs will twist in the sheets and your palms will paw around for an exit sign
It must have been easier to dream in horizontal"
This whole poem was just fascinating! Great job, interesting and enjoyable to read! :)

Very interesting poem - quite thought provoking which I like! Great! Keep writing.

~Anna~ ^_^