the first two lines really spoke to me. this was an amazing poem:) nice work.

i would love your opinion on my own stuff.

"The grape-juice skies." That's definitely an interesting way to depict the sky--how youthful.

"You stumble away. / And I cripple myself." The transition between these two stanzas was brilliant--the speaker watches everyone else 'walk' through this world with ease, while they're left to face their obstacles alone.

Keep up the good work. :)

i really like the way you've written this. i can relate so much =/

k.X