I really couldn't catch the flow of it, to be honest. I had to jump back a couple of times and reread to try and get my bearings back. Was that intentional?

I like the plot though, sounds really juicy, with lots of action and "fuck"!

Overall, I liked reading it, and I just felt that it could have flowed better. But good job!

Hope to read your next entry =]

Hello! I'm the douchefuck who made the pseudochallenge! XD (I love that word btw)

Sadly, this was supposed to be a fluff challenge. (By the way, this doesn't violate any of the rules. xD)

...Damn though. This was freaking awesome. And -cough-kinda cute-cough-. :)

Except I don't like Faulkner much. Then again, I've only read As I Lay Dying... -.-;;