I love this story! It's an amazing concept you are working with, so interesting and so thought provoking. It's a wonderful short story, though adding chapters and making it longer would be wonderful too. Great job and supurb writing! A few grammatical or spelling mistakes but that was about it. It was one of the best stories I have read on this site for sure! I added it to my favorites :)

Very good. It's extremely well written and makes you want to keep reading. I like when a story makes you think.