I like how you turn a legend into poetry (though it will probably do better in one of the poetry categories).

I was kind of expecting the poem to extend beyond where it ended. Perhaps put in one more stanza about how he flees into the cover of the darkness or something like that.

Wow... that is a really good story/poem. I love how it is so like idk how to desctibe it.

First, I think you have this in the wrong category.

Second: Rhyming in poetry is often cliche and forced. Don't force rhymes. Poetry is often about saying what you want to say in short terms. Forcing words just to rhyme sacrifices meaning for a word, and in some cases a line. It's not always bad to rhyme. As an exercise, you may want to try writing a poem that doesn't rhyme at all, and just say exactly what you want to.

Hope this helps a little.
~Laeden

I love this one, I really do.
You should write poems more often. :3
*huggles*