Loved this for so long. I remember reading the original a couple of years back and it was one of my favorite FP stories ever! Glad to see that you're continuing it after all this time. :)

I Like, I Lust, I Love!!Please Update Soon!!

Can't wait to find out if it's Track or Court! Methinks it's Track because she likes his touch, whereas she only likes Court's voice.

Anyhoo, since it's my first time reviewing I'll give you my overall impressions
1) I like that the characters are quirky/crazy
2) I like that the main character sees life differently from everybody else and is somewhat innocent as opposed to being jaded
3) I'm worried that the craziness thus far will devolve into a plot-less mess of clever thoughts and phrases (they are clever, but i like plots, too :))
4) I LOVE that this is not a story about the high school social hierarchy, at least not a blatant story about it
5) It seems weird that college boys are so interested in hanging out with a high school girl, especially such an ODD one, hopefully you clear that oddity up somewhere in the story.

Anyway, those are my immediate impressions, I'm looking forward to reading more!

I really enjoyed this first chapter! Original setting.

I just started your story and I'm already hooked. It's so original. I have to admit I was laughing out loud in a vera vera crazy manner when I read this chapter. I'm sure my family thought I was insane. Great job!

The plot thickens, lol. I still think she's going to end up with Court since whenever she's not touching Track she thinks he's weird, LOL, but I have to say I wasn't expecting them to kiss so soon. Wonder how her brother'll react. I wonder how she'll react once she's away from him and has time to think about what she did.

LOL at her freaking out that she'd hug a serial killer with open arms. There were a few mistakes wording wise, [her grandmother threatened to stab her dad with his knitting needles] and other little things like that.

Um, yes... I don't actually remember which challenge I had now. Ha ha? So if you could just tell me... That'd be good.

Also, I wish to inform you that I don't like love triangles. Pick a guy already!

And also, I don't read Russian. You got a new what?

And no, I am not interested in helping. Rather busy at the moment, attempting to not fail at life. The usual.

Wait, wait, I forget - who's she going to end up with? Court or Track?

Anyway. Sup mah homey.

When do I have to start that bloody story again? Am I even in it?

great! I'm so glad to here your back to your normal writing schedule!
Sorry about your kitty, I've had quite a few pets and it never gets easier.
Ugh, Adelaide's family sounds like mine: a bit dysfunctional but great chapter!

Wow, you've had a sucky time of it [minus the Warped Tour]. Sorry about your cat.

Gotta say, this chapter, made me uncomfortable, mainly that whole section with her father. Sabrina ** me off, because how stupid do you have to be not to realise no matter what you're going through you have to be a parent for your kids. She was in the terminal stages and you couldn't stand by your wife? You, my good man, are a punk ** and a **. And you Sabrina, better hope you don't catch some kind of terminal disease because you are on your own. 23 and you don't get why he shouldn't have abandonned his kids.

All those excuses and none of them are really worth anything. And even though they don't seem to mind, that whole scene with strangers watching? Brutal [though LOL at her grandfather and uncle getting into it in a random side conversation].

That whole bit was really well done, I'm sure if there had been a bit more build up it would've been sadder, if I had read the previous chapter with her freakout then this right away it probably would've had more impact but even with the lull it told us a lot and it didn't feel like a filler at all, you sort of see why Adelaide is the way she is [her father abandons her mother, her mother dies {abandoning her since she's a child} and then her father abandons her] that would mess someone up//make them go to alternate states. Her grandparents probably didn't help, lol.

Nice throw in of humour to lighten it up before it seemed to be getting a bit too heavy, I think of the chapter had been serious the whole way through, the segue to whatever might be coming next might not work as well. OR there'd be an awkward silence as everyone tried to deal with what just happened, which would've worked as well but your way of doing it was smooth.

Speaking of awkward moments, Wow, bringing up threesomes in front of her family? LOL, admittedly, her father is a bit late in saying what is and isn't a good idea in regards to her since he did give up all rights to her but I can understand her discomfort. And Track, full on kissing her palm?! lol, man is smooth/brave or wants Fielding to break his foot of in his throat, one or the other.

Interesting that she can't imagine a physical reaction when she switches Track's face for Court's, but her reaction to Court's voice is more oomph, imo, since she seems to crave it while she's wary or Track. BUT that could be because she doesn't understand how she feels about Track where as Court's voice is an understandable reason for her to want to be near him/hear him speak. This will be interesting.

I gotta say, I do like the fact that this is more focused but still amusing. It's no longer the random type of amusement it had before but now the characters outside of Adelaide seem real as well. I like.

Oh, there is one part in regards to her father where she's not sure if he's really changed and she says she doesn't want to 'hand her self on the clothes line' or something to that affect instead of 'hang'. There might have been more mistakes but I got caught up in the story, lol, and none jumped out at me.

Great new chapter I loved it! I can't wait for the next one!

So this chapter did answer the 'what does he want' question but at the same time, it doesn't, LOL, just because i don't see how he thinks another baby will make his kids not feel guilty.

"Well daddy, since you've decided to spawn again and pay attention to me after who knows how many years, of course I'll live with you, totally ignoring the fact that technically I'm almost full grown and you haven't had to deal with none of my problem years!! :D"

Yeah, can't see that happening, lol. Especially since his daughter doesn't respect his wife in any way. And she treats her like a child.

Track is about as subtle as a knee to the face and has no filter between his brain and mouth. You'd think after Fielding went off on Pace for the whole 'get a date' thing, he'd be a bit more cautious about he says to her.

Adelaide creates the weirdest situations though I won't lie when she thought Track was a zombie my first thought was 'then Cambridge must be a zombie too' even though I think I know why he's staring at her.

[It figured a zombie wouldn't talk about eating. Sitting next to him was far more than unsettling. I wasn't quite sure what I'd do if he suddenly attacked me.]

I think you mean 'would' talk about eating instead of wouldn't.

Interesting chapter just because of how Adelaide reacts to things. Her father wanting her makes her sit out in the rain and have a big enough attack to call Fielding, she thinks her brother's friend is a roommate and she wishes she had a knife to poke him in the eye.

Probably overanalyzing since I'm sure Adelaide is aware her zombie/alien theories aren't real, but still, the fact that against flesh eating monsters lol, she seems content to think she can handle it on her own but when it comes to her father she needs back up is pretty telling.

wow every chapter is better than the last! totally crushing on this story and look forward to the next chapter

Hmm, would the old lady really hug her? She seems more like the type to give an awkward pat on the back if she's willing to smack her with a cane. And is this the same cat Adelaide tried to steal before that she's now trying to beat?

Why does her dad want her I wonder? Does Sabina need a new playmate or something? And at 17, what can he really do now? If he is taking her because he wants to look good for business reasons it's a bit late as she's already been raised and you can't really change someone by the time they're 17 anyway.

And if he did get her, did he think she'd like him/thank him for doing it? She might be strange but she also seems insecure.

Interesting chapter, I like that her brother is coming for her no questions asked, it reinforces the image you're creating for him this time around, especially since he seems to think she can't take care of herself.

Am I the bag lady? I have no idea. Although if I was, I'd be like one of those psycho old grannies on the ads where they carry around bricks in their handbags so that if anyone tries to mug me, I could knock them out cold.

Yeah man. That's just how I roll.

I think some crazy arse ** broke my foot on the weekend by jumping on my foot with a stiletto. ** teeny-bopping club-whores. How do you tell if you've broken a foot bone? Hmm. Maybe I can get a good deal for crutches out of this if I play my cards right.

And no, you can have your ** horror challenge. But be warned: if whoever made up my challenge complains, you should tell them to suck it up. Because I ain't gonna be writing no in-tah-llec-tu-ahl in-spir-in' story. M-k?

Oh yeah. Nothin' like a good hick accent to really rub in the fact that I'm the antithesis of what they're expecting.

So when are we supposed to start writing? Because I haven't written in at least a year. This is going to take some serious effort. Did I spell serious wrong? It's such an odd looking word. Serious. I think I have.

Anyway. Yah. Catch ya later, dude. -insert stoner-esque-rolling-of-eyes-