WOW I was going to give you a favorite line but I cant decide, so instead I am gonig to tell oyu that the whole thing is just WOW. I love especialy the line

Those goblins of the night, those discrepancies of fate.

that word descrpencies works so well here especially with the line above amazing Mirabella

I like this one! Theme is pretty obvious, but it presents a sort of cautionary tale to the reader that is wonderfully in keeping with the tradition of gothic horror. The descriptive text is just enough to get the reader's imagination wandering, but not so overcomplicated as to restrict it. My favorite stanza was "Dreaming still of gravestones, and an ever-burning candle." Something about the idea of the candle was just fascinating to me because it could mean so many different things. A life snuffed out, or a life that cannot be snuffed out, or the eyes of the predator, or... the list goes on! Well written.

This paints a beautifully grotesque picture! The description was very elaborate and vivid.

I really enjoyed these lines:
Eerily they groan, and whisper words of hate,
Those goblins of the night, those discrepancies of fate.

I thought "discrepancies of fate" was such an interesting way of describing them.

Mantle and candle was a sort of loose rhyme, but I don't know if I'd change it--the description in both words is very interesting. Something about a mantle of mist...Just sounds cool. Recently I wrote a sentence describing fog as skirts on the trees. Mist/fog is just so creepy and moving...Works so well with the scene, too.

Very interesting poem. I bet it's especially popular come Halloween :)

Thank you for your reviews, by the way,

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Enchanting and creepy. You kept me hooked until the end. The imagery in this piece is beautiful.

Again, You have amazed me. Talent is definently in your veins.
The title is amazing. Flawless. Your flow is smooth and nice, and your rhyme is wonderfully designed. This is probably my favorite so far.

I very much like this. It's a bit eerie, a bit beautiful, a bit mysterious. And I love the title. Lovely overall.

~Mara

Wow, you never fail to surprise me! I've probably said this a thousand times, but I love the language and the syntax and the rhyme and the never-failing beat of all your poems. I read this one out loud and the story progressed at such a comfortable pace.

The poem itself is haunting and it reminded of Dracula. I loved the use of repetion - a wail and a spirit keening, and the direct address (you). Makes the reader feel cursed and trapped.

I honestly don't know what else to say or what you could have done to make it better, just trust me, this is a GREAT poem..

~fleur

Pretty sure I just shivered...
Second thoughts about visiting the graveyard at night, anyone?
I think this is my new favourite.
xx

This poem was really awesome. I loved how everything comes together, I just love the whole poem in general. I give you two thumbs up :D

Oh wow, I love this! At first I was a bit skeptical, to be honest I wasn't sure how good the poem would be, but once again you managed to make it great.
I love the idea of "silver stones of moonlight", that's one of the best pieces of imagery I've ever heard. The reference back to a "keening spirit" is fantastic, especially since we then find out the it's probably one of the Red-Eyed man's victims.
Once again, I really love this. Fav'd