Your story flows exceptionally well and you have a healthy level of dialogue which I personally find hard to create. Please continue to write as it is a captivating story and I am eager to learn what happens.

Wow, I've only read the first chapter but this is looking great! This is my first review really so I can't really put advice and stuff. So yeah, keep up the god work!

Already, I've become hooked by this story. It does seem to have a fairly cliche plot-boy is chosen one who must save the world, blah blah blah-but you put your own wonderfully unique twist on the plot. I especially love the humor, and how reluctant James is about being a hero. His interactions with Louisa are a pure joy to read.

The plot seems to be shaping up to be an interesting one, too. I love the way you had the characters explain the deal with the spirits-technically, it /is/ an info-dump, but done naturally through the characters' dialogue instead of all foisted on the reader in one long unbroken paragraph that destroys the narrative flow. I can't say that the plot is the most original, but then again, in many cses it's not the ideas that matter, but the execution. And currently you've got a wonderful execution. I have to say I really love how James is affiliated with rain; most main characters are affiliated with fairly stereotypical elements like fire and wind, so it's great seeing you take a different spin on it.

I would like a little more backstory on the village and James, but so far that's the only thing I'm missing. Great job, I'll be sure to stick around for more.

Ha! you're good at the hidden humor thing.

This feels very epic. i'm excited to read more.