I like the paralells that you draw here; it's like a movie, but it's also more then that. The characters are richer then in any flick (of an era) good job with this. I thought it could have been longer, and the middle a little more drawn out. But overall, a joy to read. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.

"Gaunt frame." Marvelous word choice.

"Soft with age." That's adorable.

"Smashed and then slowly popping back to life." Good metaphor for obstacles and resilience.

I love it! So so so adorable. Wish this scene played in my life. :] Great piece.

i'm wondering if your inspiration for this was "footloose" because that's exactly what it reminds me of, with the railroad tracks and leather jackets. =]
i love the descriptions, they're very easy to picture in my mind. that kind of love is what we all want, but sadly it usually doesn't play out that way...
nicely done, keep this up!