Brilliant story. I think it's your best yet. You made me fall in love with Jimmy and Ellie and their paths and that elevator trip. and I loved the theme of 'seizing the day'. I loved the attraction and connection between them as well. and-

They kissed with growing hopelessness. Jimmy’s arm wrapped around her waist, and the other hand ran down her neck, and her hands were lost in his hair and down his back, and they couldn’t breathe or think because all the while because they were transporting so fast and so crazy through these alternate realities, and he saw her in her apron making dinner, and he saw them tumbling together in bed, and he saw their kids laughing, and he saw her green Christmas sweater and how she loved the necklace he got her, and he saw her hands wrinkled and her hair gray and he still loved her as much and as hard as he did now, and the elevator was getting closer and closer to the top.

OHMYGOD SHE HAS MY NAME!

that always makes me happy. i loved it, but then again i always love your stuff, so this shouldn't be a surprise. i'm so glad you're back, hon.

This is so cute without being entirely cliche. Very well written.

aw thats such a cute story :D..for some reason i thought she was going to be suicidal from the summary..or was it meant to sound that way just not literally?

Wow, I loved it! It made me cry because Ellie is in a much similar situation that I was. I loved someone, but I hurt him, on purpose so that he would hate me, and my parents wouldn't be disappointed...my parents never knew about him, nor will I ever tell them...sorry, I didn't mean to bore you, it just came out of the moment, this was very well written, and I hope one day, it will be okay...thank you for writing this...really, I can't thank you enough.

I loved it. THis was definately an original that impressed me. Nicely done! :)

This was an excellent story and very well written. Your story had a nice pacing and did not drag. I'm glad that they are together. I would love to read more about them.

Nice writing style. You need to be careful about typographical errors, though, but I guess that's every writers' worst and plaguing enemy. It just won't go away without editors!

The dialogs where they go on to engage the small talk was somewhat confusing considering that none of their personality is showing in their speeches. Maybe you could add how they reacted to each other's question and/or answers. Or you could add more personality to their speeches.

Their sudden closeness seemed to morph out of nowhere. Maybe you could write about some tell-tale signs that they were loosening up. Even the romance seemed so sudden. Try to go beyond Freddie finding her beautiful and explore his emotions. I think that would really be a nice touch.

Very nice short story, but you could stretch it a bit and it would be even better. I guess our megalomaniac minds could see the entire thing in our minds and we sometimes assume that our readers get it too. Be careful with that (a warning I should heed myself).

Hope you can use this in your other writings.

And they lived happily ever after! Its the most realistic version of a fairy tale I have ever read. I don't know if you were trying to do that but if you were, you succeeded, and if you weren't, it is still a great story.