umm, hot much? and so, so dirty. ;D

more smut please!!

My golly, the male libido is irrepressable.

Anyway, I love everything about this oneshot. The descriptions are especially amazing. I got a real feel (innuendo alert) for who Ty was, both physically and personality wise, which is unusual for a smutt oneshot. All I'll say is I wish I knew more giant sweaty black men...sigh.

Actually, Joey's personality came out pretty clear too, although more of a physical description might have been nice (although I understand it's near impossible to make a physical description of the narrator seem natural when you're using first person).

As for the smutt...well, I won't go into detail but I'm glad you did. It was perfect. It was ** hot but not overly romaticized (spelling?), which I liked. It seemed like really believable sex, I could totally imagine it happening (and that's what I shall be doing when I'm bored at work today).

Amazing job. I have to check out your other stuff!

Ty is one big guy.

"that could beat any puppy" puppy's?

"Eventually, I...yelled my release" I think you should lose the eventually or maybe replace it with 'When I could stand it no longer' or something. Eventually make it sound like he was just sitting there doing nothing: eventually the rain stopped or eventually the economy improved. It's a 'it was going to happen anyway' sort of word. Not passionate or hot.

But the rest of the story was. I'm glad you'll be writing again and look forward to reading more of your stuff.