Good chapter. The dialouge gets really confusing. I have a hard time following who is talking sometimes. I would make it more clear, so stupid people, like me, can follow what you are trying to say :)

Good chapter. Careful that your character descriptions aren't contradicting. Like you made the mother in the beginning super cool then all of a sudden she was a member of bitch town. Just careful of that is all. It gets confusing. Then the other thing is the speech between blondie boy and kaelyn gets confusing. But there were really good descriptions, humor, all that. Great chapter!

Haha, wow, sounds very similar to another Nana that I know... hm... a little inspiration pulled from there I wonder? :P I liked this. It was funny, and sarcastic. Now, all I have to say that you are getting better with spelling and grammar. But the sentence structure could use a little work. Have you ever considered a Beta reader? They are just wonderful dawling. Great chapter!

nice...can't wait for the next chapter! i thought i'd give you a little *pat on the back* for the work you do. NICE!

bite me! ha! That was just fucking cool!

I love her! She's great! Tristan is also great!

They're gonna make the hell of a couple!

Waiting 4 your update

*Abby*

cool update son!

hahaha i lurve this chapter.

its really good.

she's funny/.

update soon

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sarcasm is one of the best things ever created.

i like your story

update soon

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Yeah, i can tell you like sarcasm, and you tend to over exaggerate too. Awesome! Me too! Update soon!

The story is extremely good, babe! I love the idea of Nan the bitch!

And, oh yeah, I hate whores too!

Her mom is so fucking cool! I wish my mom were like that too...

Anyway, hope u update soon!

*Abby*

Hey, just wanted to say I liked this new chapter...also, your character Kaelyn sounds an awful lot like my best friend Kaelyn. Haha.

But about the story, I think you have very good potential! Good luck!