Insperational! Thanks so much for telling us such a wonderful story. If you get the chance maybe you could help me with my writing?

Wow, I'm really liking this. At first, I didn't know what to think about Patrick, but now I think I'm starting to understand him better. As with ARROW, your characterization is excellent. You have a talent for bringing out your characters' emotion and feelings in a very realistic and interesting way, and that in turn makes it easy to identify with them on a more personal level. Oh yeah, and everyone has normal-sounding names. I don't know why exactly, but it's refreshing to see that.

Patrick bothered me for a while. He initially struck me as the sort of person who just despised people for no reason, and that made it harder for me to connect with him at first. Now that I'm nine chapters in, however, I think I can safely say that most of that has changed. I find that can sort of relate to him, in more ways than one.

I like Sarella. She's the sort of gal I wouldn't have minded hanging out with when I was younger, if I'd had any real friends back then. Anyway, she's neat.

I will definitely be keeping tabs on this. Keep it up!

Airblade64

just wanted to review to make sure you do NOT make apple patrick's love interest. i know most reviews are about this, but really, patrick belongs with anne or riley. (I haven't quite decided which one yet.)

yea cause obviously i'm in charge lol.

anyway, love this story and dont want patrick to end up with a girl like that.

I think patrick is a really likeable character. I cant exactly pinpoint why, but I think it might be in his quirks. He's quiet but really opinionated and also a HUGE mamma's boy but he'd never admit it.

riley is a good foil for him too. Anne's a little 2D right now. I don't see her blossoming into a girlfriend... i hope not anyway... i want to see him with riley!
keep up the good work. i'm stalking you!

HE CAN DO IT.
i honestly love patrick, and at first i wasn't sure if i liked riley, but i think she and patrick are sort of perfect for each other...
but i also still love anne and patrick.
he's 12 now right? almost 13. o.O so many responsibilities...
and so many girlfriends to choose from! (2 haha...)

great how patrick's sort of accidentally falling into the role of class clown maybe? he's so not clownish so that's really ironic. I love this story btw

poor kid! on his birthday no less!
mom seems kind of a mess
i think this whole arc said a lot about humans in general
it's interesting to see the story through his eyes even tho its not first person
"out of the mouth of babes" i think that was some saying...
awesome!

i ship patrick/anne...cutest pair ever
she's so awkward and he's so not-awkward that it gets awkward. cute
i know when they get older they'll be just as awkward

feeling sorry for patrick...
how does a 5 year old evoke so much emotion?
i like how we get to see them grow up.
every year he's different...
and i like keeping track of his friends too.

Interesting! I anticipate reading more more more.

Am I the only one who thinks this story is absolutely EPIC?? I'm only in the first chapter and you have made me an addict. I'm so excited to get to know Patrick and his insane mother and anyone else in this place.

This story really feels like a new world.