ah it is over .. i am disappointed ..so many twists .. so brilliant ..

Brilliant .. I love it .. first chapter to captivate me from begining to end .. and the cliffhanger .. done like a pro .. now i wanna read more. which i will do

more relaxed .. i like it .. ashes is truely funny ! keep up the good work !

Y'know I had come to love Ace so much I hoped you wouldn't kill him. Not that it was a bad thing, it just showed how well you make the reader empathize (hope that's the rght word) with the character. The way you wrote it actually provoked feeling, so kudos.
And now I hope you really have killed him or this review will seem pointless once you've written and posted the epilogue.
Also, you really nailed the switching POV, which whilst trawling through this site for decent fics, I have found to be a rarity.
Can't wait for the last chapter.
(We have The Final Cut by Pink Floyd or rather my Dad does. Gotta love Pink Floyd.)

I like this chapter .. fast paced and full of action.

lots of nice symbolism ! .. how dare you kill bambi .. again

I like this one .. more than the other two chapters .. finally the story comes to life its quick it builds up it ends on a suspenseful moment ... this chapter is making me wanna read the rest !

This was really super-dooper-pooper-scooper awesome.I like that although they are hunters, and seem to be doing these horrible things to Ace, you still get inside each character's heads (and hearts) and show the more human side of them. Having that moment between Ace and Maxwell was a realy nice touch because in that instant of curtousy and bonding, it brought Maxwell into a new light in my eyes (and Ace's, I bet). He instantly became more relateable, and he was seen as not only a hunter, but a person. I like that you are showing their vulnerable characteristics, instead of just making them tough-bad-** hunters (though they are that as well). Personally, I think this is too good to be a secondary plot. please, dont steal their thunder and give it to another story! But honestly, even though it is going deep into supernatural mythology and what not, it's amazing that the characters are so relateable and human, and I think everyone can see a little bit of themselves in each person. You keep the character's emotions and flaws right under the surface, showing every now and then so that we can see their true colors, but not lingering long enough for us to lose interest or that it's obvious. This is going to evolve into an amazing story with well-developed characters. Can't wait to read more!

Hey! Very interesting story. It really drew me in. It’s kind of mysterious, it definitely has me wondering what’s going on, and what’s coming next….Hm??…. ill be reading more!
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Ok this is cool so far! I like the alternating between the two characters. I can already make out the differences early on. Ace's paragraphs are simpler and almost broken a bit, which is different than Heidi's longer, more developed paragraphs. I like the contrast and Ace's story-telling has a lot more feeling to it. I can feel the light forcing its way through his eyelids as thought I am him. I'll definitely read mroe when I have the chance. Thanks for reading Dark Society: Genesis!

Until Next Time . . . .

I love how its very confusing at the beginning, and then towards the end of the first chapter you know what your dealing with.

Love the way how people can become vampires in this story, it a good theory, and your good with explaining it.

It does have an original theme to it, the writing style is different, and the characters are quickly developed within the first few paragraphs you have. :) its a very good story,
one worthy of publication i think.

-Kaiyora.

Haha, I love Ashes. :) And Maxwell! This would make a wicked tv show; when I picture the scenes in my head I see everything in black, red and white. Is that weird? :P

As soon as Ace slid the shackles off, all I could think was: "Uh-oh..."

Love the song choices by the way - giant thumbs up from me :)

And I enjoy the way you write; it's not too forced, and with a really good pace. Great job!!

- B.

I love the ideas behind this! Very original, which is way too hard to come by on this site lately. Your characters seem very fleshed out, not at all one-dimensional, which is also a nice change.

I'm intrigued. On to the next chapters I go :)

- B.