Ah! Geez! I need to read the 'Infinite Playlist' if that's what inspired all this awesome stuff!
I can't find anything wrong with the entire poem at all- perfect, perfect, perfect.
Well. It was a little harsh, for those of us who kind of like the idea of marriage. But that's okay, we'll get over it. =)
I definitely like the concept, the wording, the symbolism, the occasional grin-producing line...Lovely, darling.