OH I was so touched with the thank you at the end...Didn't see it coming...*Blushes*
You are most welcome dear!
I must say that I was saddened to see this end but I'm glad that you are on the second part. This first part did just what it needed to do with the excitement, intrigue, action, and that smooth romance that is weaved throughout.

The interactions of all the characters are very well planned out and the drama that is sure to unfold in the next part will continue to have readers holding on to their screens.

The sheer emotion that is weaved within these chapters shows that you really enjoy this work and that you will only make it shine more as you take us through the world of the vampire as seen through the eyes of the reluctant loveable hit man and his busty, clever target.

I truly think this is an awesome story and I am so glad i have finally had a chance to read it all the way through. I think I would go nuts if I had to do chapter by chapter you know waiting for updates. This was such a fun and inspiring read and you have given me the want to step it up in my own writing.

Take care and thank you for the shout out again luv!

c - Beer Run

ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!
I knew she wasn't dead because that would be the end...right? Sorry for the threats...Ahem...Now,
I really like Edward. I think he is holding a flame for Jinx that he is not letting on too much about right now but I see him turning into sort of a confident. Are they going to get closer? This sounds like a triangle could develop.
Oh but I did like how he told her to make sure she had sneakers.
Lol'd the little quirky phrases are really great and I like how they all seem to bring that realism to the story. Bravo with that!

Oh and didn't I say Edgar is a %^&*^&^&*)%&$%$%$%^&*^*()&(*() OH I didn't well he is. He needs to really get it in the end. I was hoping Victor could shoot a loogie at him or something. He is terribly sexy, hands down, but just such a pompous a** that I can't wait to see him dead. Oh that was a little uhm okay...

I also like how Victor is still pining after Jinx and she is so interested in him. It makes the build up really worth it and makes this such a delicious budding love. KUWAII!
Okay on to the next chappie!

c - Beer Run

Hm...I dont think he killed her.
(If he did I must now hunt you down...)
But the whole state of depression is so masterfully down you got some real skills lovey! I love how you nailed his past and present together in the unlikely bond of a victim. The mystery of his past is also one that is gripping and you feel sorry for hin as he suffers with his demons.

Oh this was really short but it held a lot of information and feeling and your playing with our minds in which you are dancing around whether he killed her or not shows that you got some true writing talent.

Love this so much! I got to see what happens.
(Like I said though...She'd better not be dead...)
c - Beer Run

Okay that was such a thrill!! DAR...must...die!!
I really thought you were going to make him take more advantage of her but what you gave us was still good enough for us to scream at him! James was such a freakin wuss and he's on my 'Character should die slowly' list too, the punk!
The descriptions and details are really driving this home for me since I could smell that stank breath. I almost puked up my breakfast...Thanks for the tug at my stomach...I think. :Z

I was sure though that Victor would be her savior since you had not mentioned anyone else and he was also in the alley. But he almost took too long...**Shakes Fist**
Now I have one complaint...Why did he not put a bullet in Mr. Gross? I really was waiting for him to plug the nasty ba* but okay maybe you will give him his do later in a more fantastic way...Yes?

Oh the dreamy eyed look of Jinx to Victor about him giving her orders was so cute and I could almost see him sort of blush. I love his reluctance to just let loose.

I got to see what happens next because I was wondering why he was holding his chest while running. Asthma maybe? Okay well on to the next chappie...

c Beer Run

Okay...Edgar...must...die...seriously...
That was so intense and Him is really well written. I mean Mister creepiness makes my skin crawl so awesome job with that. Now I was a little surprised that Victor did not give more sarcastic dialogue but in hindsight I guess he figured it would leave to a pre-mature death and the fact he did not get the hit would tarnish his rep.

That whole scene had me thinking that this would make a nice series on T.V. so thank you for giving me an idea to pitch to an agent...J/K, but you should...Hint,hint.
I truly like the way in which you write your story also that you don't use a lot of unnecessary details but what you do is concentrate on the main characters enough to layer them well.That is always such a plus.

As for the Australian dude chasing Jinx, I was in here yelling for her to run and then when he got her I screamed 'You Mutha...'So thank you for pulling that emotion out of me and making me a part but what will happen now? I hope someone comes to stop him.
**Hurries to next scene**

c Beer Run

SENSATIONAL!!
Oh your opening was so full of the emotion that so many suffer who walk the path of righteousness, or at least try. The imagery of the organs music going through out the pews really brought to life that feeling of dread and lonesomeness.
Excellent! I felt so bad for Jinx also that I was some what in a state of bitterness that she was going through the motions like so many and that she sat isolated among a group that would call themselves children of God.

However I took it another way to look at the fact the church is where the sinner is to go to find some sort of peace and release that feeling of anguish. It is just up to the sinner to make the effort and God will do the rest.

Her transformation/ flashback was also really well done because it did not take forever and you gave us enough information to keep us hooked.

I can't wait to see what will befall our precious Jinx next.

c - Beer Run

ACTION ACTION ACTION!!
Yes this is so packed with it that it reads really fast but man!! You did a great job of telling what was going on. I like the whole stand off with everyone pointing guns and the outfit of Jinx, well she borrowed it from me...lol'd!

The details of the scene also make this stand out and scream intrigue because you juts know something will happen at the craps table...You know..'Crap' Happens...Bad joke but hey...Ahem...
Oh the tension running really high between the assassin and his prey. Sorry Victor life isn't easy and she is no easy job...I love how you made sure that their interaction was also laced with sensuality it makes the insides of a romantic bubble.

Thank you for the feelings!
Oh now I need to get to the next chapter because I don't think I go to read it and that is where the mysteries are really unfolding for me! This is really good!

OH yes I love that imagery at the beginning and the poor intravert assassin. I love the way you wrote out his cool demeanor and it seems he's haunted by his own demons.
Interesting. I like your descriptions too because they set up the scene so well I felt as if I was in the room with the hit man looking at Jinx's files.

The little stir of infatuation will certainly be a great point for drama and tension later on. You are doing a great job of keeping Jinx strong and feminine to so kuddos to you for that and I also really like that you have a different take on vampires here.
So they are rounding them up hunh? I have to read on to find out more.

This is really good and I already know what happens next so its good to have a story I don't mind re-reading.

c - Beer Run

Oh I hope I am your 100 review, because I do remember this from the book club when I hit that strange moment in life, but anyway.
I think I had commented before on how funny it is that the apple scene reminded me of the book Twilight.

I guess every vampire story will have that in there somewhere...Lol'd.
But I like your Edward better. He seems to genuinely care for Jinx possibly even more than what I see here and I like the fact she is strong and fearless. Your descriptions are very good to that I can see them well in my head and the pace of this chapter was also very well done.

Sorry I forgot to leave a review but now it is recorded!
On to the next chapter...

c - Beer Run of the Roadhouse

GREAT CHAPTER! I like how you wrote this so it could be the end, or could continue. You are an amazing writer, keep it up.

-Alphien, with love from the Roadhouse.

I knew it! That was brilliant to make us think that she was dead. Brilliant, I tell you. Oh, and since Edgars palms were bloody, does that mean he's a closet vampire? That could be interesting.

Damn Victor! They would have made such a cute couple. Oh well...maybe she can be a zombie vampire? Haha, or maybe not. Great chapter!

Victor wouldn't kill little Jinxy, would he? I would be very sad if he did. *Pout*

:reads on to see if assumptions are correct:

Hmm. In the last chapter you said her name was Jinxanna, and HE just said her name was "Jinxanne McGovern". Is that a typo, or is the dude confused?

Anyway, great chapter. I wonder who this Australian guy is.

This was a sad, sweet chapter. The was Jinx is seeking forgiveness for something she had no control over is very touching. And the flashback was appropriately placed and worded. Great work.