I have actually been wanting to read a story like this in a while...we never get the cheerleaders point of view!

P.S.

Bobby is a retarded name.
Tommy is much better.

:P

peace,

OOD

Whoa I love this story! I think it's because of the whole Southern thing. I'm from Chicago so there's no Southern for me but I love the sayings. Update soon!

GASP! They kiss?! Whoa, major cliffhanger/twist!
I love the fact that she has loyal friends instead of backstabbing people.
I like her parents as well - they're sweethearts.
Hm, in reply to your reply (lol) I'm thinking that I just might have to start reading Like White Russians. Though I'm going away for a week so I can't start til then :( But I shall be reading it in the near future :)
I really like this story, please update soon!

Funny that whenever I read your stuff, so many other stories on this site can't even compare. I always found that sort of postmodernist belief that truth is relative to what surrounds us kind of fascinating (maybe I don't buy into it too much, but it sure is interesting). And here you've got Chloe and Maggie May - from two wholly different worlds - living in their own truths. One living in the light of nonconformism (or something) and one in the light of Southern Belle society. And it's great. It's so, so great, because I can't help but feel a little bitter towards Chloe, whereas in any other story she'd have my full support (which was obviously your intent). And, you know, if this were told in any other perspective, I'd be raggin on Maggie's too-revealing dress but FOR CRYIN' OUT LOUD I LOVE THAT GIRL. And her dress too dang it!

I really understand her, too. I mean she's sweet and she's considerate in - bless her heart - a sort of shallow way, but it's so innocent. I mean, honestly, the way she keeps going back to her Mom's advice and all...it's so sweet.

Love how they call each other "sugar" and "baby doll" and those references to "Lord Almighty" - the dialect gives a good sense of setting and upbringing.

Love how real this feels, love how Tommy is so obviously smitten with her - he's too sweet. (I can't wait to see more of his character. Feels like we've just gotten a taste of him, and I want more dang it!)

I like that Maggie May sometimes feels insecure, even though she is some amazing beauty queen. She's still a teenage girl, and with a mom like hers (like you said) that's just natural; I'm glad you captured that. And I'm so tired of queen bee characters that demonstrate their insecurity through insulting others or making the "Chloes" of the world's lives extremely difficult - so it's refreshing to see that Maggie just wants everything to be all right, including Chloe's make-up and shoes. She's a sweetie (gosh, I'm so sorry for hating on these Maggie characters in every other story haha! Really, thanks for writing this.)

AND I LOVE TOMMY DANG IT!

Though I have to wonder about this part: [‘It’s not you, Maggie. You’re everything I—a guy could want.’ Tommy smiled at me, patting my leg.] He was way obvious there rofl. I mean if this were a oneshot then that part would serve to give the reader hope that Maggie May would still get her happy ending...but I was wondering, since you're continuing this and all (thank GOD!), if you wanted to keep the reader in suspense a little longer. I guess I'm just used to authors trying to keep us guessing at the male lead's emotions (they're still obvious, usually)...but hey, now that I think about it, this is kind of nice, too. I mean, if you like someone that much, you're bound to slip up.

[We watched Bobby follow Chloe from the cafeteria, and then the table conversation flowed back to normal.

I guess that was the day I began to lose him.] OH MAN. I loved those lines. So poignant. Especially since she's telling the story looking back - I mean, when you can pinpoint the moment you lost the guy you love (and the catalyst was that one comment you made)...well, that's gotta hurt. Dang. Nice one.

Alright, so onto the grammar slip-ups from this second chapter:

[but doesn’t she know that too much black is never flattering on everyone!”] Everyone = anyone?

[and Abby was a ice queen in a pale blue gown.] a = an.

[The result is pretty spectacular... We made quite an entrance—my friends are pretty spectacular looking, and really, we are the life of any party.] Some tense-switching went on over there. In the first sentence, change IS to WAS. And change the "ARE"s in the last sentence to "WERE"s.

[“You’re such a better person than me,” Missy sighed.] hmm, I think that would sound better as "You're a much better person than me" or something to that effect. I mean, it is dialogue - you don't technically need correct grammar, but Missy doesn't quite strike me as the character to talk funny.

Anyhow - love the concept, love the characters, love the writing. Keep it up and update soon! You're some kind of awesome.

;)becky

love love LOVE this story! Please continue it! :D It's really interesting.

I really this; it's original and well-written and I like Maggie May's mom. She sounds so nice and kind of reminds me of my friend's mom who used to bake us cookies when we were younger.

And I hope she ends up with Tommy--he seems...well, interestingly hot lol

Update soon!

Hahah as long as they're puppy lovers they're not that bad
never thought of that :P
but what about the ones that kick puppies...
great chapter
Tommy finally found some nerve
but I have a feeling he might get his heart broken, or am I wrong?
I love how you show her being almost an ice queen on the outside, showing no emotion, but then practically breaking down on the inside
and the 'momma's and the 'sugar's make me smile too

hi i'm obsessed with this story and this character. i always love it when you play on the southern-belle thing, it's a culture so far removed from mine i can hardly even imagine it. i'm also obsessed with you. mwah lovelovelove byee

I'm always too lazy to sign in. :P

I've been a big fan of your writing since before you deleted them. I just recently discovered what happened, and I'm glad everything turned out for the best!

I've been reading your new Lifestyles, and yes, it's much, much more well-written. I figured that, since I love that one so much, I should try out your other stories. And I'm glad I did! :)

I really like this story, quite possibly more than I do Lifestyles. I've never really considered the story from the cheerleader girlfriend's pov, maybe because she was always made out to be the ** everyone hoped would die. I love how she isn't like that here. She's actually a genuinely nice person.

Aahh! I can't wait to read more! Update soon. :))

Hugs, Emi

This is so cool! I love how you are telling this story from the "opposite" perspective. You are de-clicheing the main character. It's so refreshing and fun to read. Please continue soon!

I feel so bad for her. Why would Chloe glare at her if she already had Bobby? Maggie May is so nice, and the way she's portrayed is so different.Keep writing!:)

I like Maggie! :) She seems really sweet... compared to other stories about the popular girl being mean/bitchy/blah3.

Please update soon! This story is awesome.

I love this story so far :)

this is great! im glad you're continuing(: