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fatbird33 2009-08-07 . chapter 1
very interesting poem. i loved the darkness here (and i usually don't like darkness, so yay). My favorite line was "Why!" it was so short and powerful. you laid that out really nicely. Just a nitpicky thing; the last line instead of having ...? you should just have ?. i think it would be more final, like the end. you know what i mean? anywho, nice work and check out the review marathon (link in my profile) it's fun.
~fatbird:)
MagicWords 2009-06-19 . chapter 1
A very interesting build up to the last line. Written fairly well. I really liked the last line!
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