 fatbird33 2009-08-07 . chapter 1very interesting poem. i loved the darkness here (and i usually don't like darkness, so yay). My favorite line was "Why!" it was so short and powerful. you laid that out really nicely. Just a nitpicky thing; the last line instead of having ...? you should just have ?. i think it would be more final, like the end. you know what i mean? anywho, nice work and check out the review marathon (link in my profile) it's fun.
~fatbird:) |