Wow! What happens next?

Hey Emma,

I really enjoyed looking at your writing for the first time today. Did you do this story for a short-story contest? I noticed that it was labeled as -Complete-. It just seemed a little brief, you didn't get too into characters or setting or much else. I know I'm being kind of a hypocrite here cause I've yet to revise some of my short-story entries, but maybe you ought to consider adding to this. It has great potential, and you have great voice and such great descriptions! I was really amazed! This could be so much more than what you have it right now and I look forward to seeing what you can make of it. Keep up the excellent writing and I'll see you at rehearsal.

kcfrid