 tonight we bloom 2009-08-06 . chapter 1With every new piece I read of yours, my jaw drops lower and lower. This is so flawless in every aspect. |
 Kate Marshall 2009-07-19 . chapter 1I love the word choice of 'thunder' in regards to his laughter. I get the clear sound of a loud, surrounding kind of laugh. Very descriptive. :)
"i see purple summers and violent lovers" I like that phrase. Because of the line break, this wasn't a rhyme or an internal rhyme, but the similar sounds gave a nice rhythm to the poem.
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-Kate |
 Autumn's Addiction 2009-07-02 . chapter 1I really like this. Especially the first part of it. It's beautiful, really :)
I also like the (or am i dying?) part. I don't know, it just really stood out to me. This was awesome. Keep writing! (not that I think that you wouldn't...) You're great with poetry ^^ |
 Isca 2009-06-23 . chapter 1"Violent lovers." How erotic.
"Purple summers." Unique colour choice. Strong imagery.
"I lament the loss of a soul that I did not yet understand." Brilliant. What a graceful line. Wow. :D
"Or am I dying?" Ah yes, it is difficult sometimes to decide whether one is dying from joy or dying from pain.
Excellent piece! |
 myturntobebrave 2009-06-22 . chapter 1wow.
wow wow wow.
amazing.
(kind of reminded me of spring awakening.)
but in a good way. |