Wow, really juicy verse. It flows so well and the rhymes are sublime. It reminds me of Shakespeare's sonnets very much indeed though perhaps the use of thees and thous is a little bit excessive. The last lines are perfect. Really breath-taking.

i can't sonnet.

those last three lines:

wow!

You need to go through the poem and fix some of the lines-many are either 9 or 11 syllables long instead of 10.

"Thou may tunnel thyself." Brilliant line. It's very avant-garde. I also really loved the 'coral' part. :D

Keep up the good work!