mimi!! i finished it na.!! ang ganda. lalo na ung love story with chace. :)) ikaw ba ung girl dun?? :)) kakakilig.. :)) i'll wait for the next.. :)

kakakiligg.. ooh... sana totoo ung ganian.. tas mangyare saken... dba? cooll!! nde keo masasabihan ng PDA.. :))

answeet.. true to life ba toh?? hahahah.. :)

Mimi!.here's your review:D

~I super Love the story.EWAN KO,parang wala akong makitang mali:P,anyway.yun nga lang,super bitin.I'LL WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTERS."patiently."haha LOL:P ..there!:D

ang ganda mimi. kahet nde ko pa nababasa. ur so galing.. :)) nde ko kaya gumawa ng ganito.. :))

like the story...it made me cry...

aww , they're cute .
this was so short though !
but still better than nothing .
anywho , update soon .
(:

aww, nakakakilig! :)
walalang. haha! :p

BTW, isn't that forbidden?
love between a human & an angel?
walalang ulit. haha. :))

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Too lazy to log in. Anyway, the novel the cute and sweet. It's easy to get lost in it. Here are some things that I found to be needing some improvement:

-There are some tense inconsistencies. Past tense is okay for flashbacks, but if you're using present tense for the regular scenes, it's best to keep that up or just use past instead if you get confused.

-It's Twilight-esque in the sense that you use terms that are too deep for a 14-year-old (especially since the first-person narrative is kind of like speaking normally, and I'm sure Eliane wouldn't speak like that and call it "normal") and that you describe characters like they're the next Hercules, or something.

-It's not the most original piece of work, and a bit predictable.

-It's best not to base characters off real people, or at least if you're basing off real people, just take a good handful of characteristics and use different names. Not nicknames or names that are a lot like the real names.

Other than that, well done for your first novel.

The story is great. That's all I can say cause I am not that good at English. I'm looking forward for the rest of the story.

hey! I like it..

you did a great a job.. it's very good

continue writing.. you're very good in english
by the way.here's your review.

thank you for letting me read this..

Ang ganda nung story oh.
Great job Mimi!
Keep up the good work. :D
Subscribe na ako. :D

aww, how sweet. :>
i like eliane's spunk.
she's got attitude. ;)
and i like chace's sweetness.
haha! :)

anyways, i want to hear your thoughts about the chapter you wrote. :>
i mean, at the end of every chapter, you can always put an author's note about that chapter.
is that okay for a suggestion? :):)
but all in all, the story's great.

keep up the good work, mimi. ;)

Chapters 1 through 10 were, I think, were only the introduction of the story. I know you can come up with something deeper rather than a ghost stalking. And I think I saw some wrong grammar in the selection. Please change the entries that were grammatically incorrect. And include Eliane's mother in the story.


Overall Rating: 3.5/5 I know you can do better. More power and inspiration to you my friend

"Only true friends can be cruelly honest"
-Donkey

Mimi! :) haha chapter 1 pa lang ung nababasa ako. eto na review mo. take care :) good writer :D