What an interesting beginning XD The main character's quirky, but not to the point where it's annoying.

When will you update again?? You updated the second chapter so quickly! and now it's July 9th! :P

hey there! i'm not quite sure how i came to find this story, but i quite like it. it's a very interesting concept... it's nice to run into original ideas on FP, it doesn't happen too often =).

I saw on your profile that you have been having some off-time writing wise, I hope that this story has made that better! I certainly hope for there to be a new chapter soon!

Keep up the good work! Toodles!

PS-I did not think that chapter 2 was bad at all, one thing though: I don't think Murphy should say that the cat hurt her pupil because either it scratched her eye (which would hurt her cornea) or he punctured her eye (which would cause A LOT more damage than a simple eye-patch cure, but it wouldn't hurt the pupil anyway because that's just a hole, it could damage the iris though).

This is really good. I love how you immediately hook your readers from the start - well, me anyhow! That hasn't changed. :) But your style definitely has something new about it, and I like it.

I really enjoyed this chapter, no matter what you say about not liking it. The only thing I found a bit confusing was the accident, but that makes sense I suppose. I was just having trouble picture how she could have broken her wrist and arm falling under a bike ... I'm sure it's possible ... Anyway, I'm rambling. Overall, I am truly having fun with this story so far.

i guess you needed to get this chapter out of the way to build up the story between these two characters, i can't wait to see what will happen between the two.

I don't think it's going too fast, in fact, it's going perfectly fine!

I love the blind eye-patch episode.
Well, all writing can never stop improving, but it is almost a badass second chapter so yay!

on to the third please.

This was even better than the first chapter. No, you didn't go too fast with this, I thought the flow was excellent and very natural. And jeez, it was funny! Whenever Murphy thought she was blind I was laughing so hard I couldn't see the computer screen. Very nice and please keep up the great work!

Ollie May

Despite the fact that it is, later than the last time I reviewed, I think, I am more awake. Who knows.

Basically, I think this is a pretty badass second chapter (it's filled with action and hopefully the second character in the summary, so I'm going to have to say that's good), so good job there. And I totally understand what you mean about second chapters, though I have yet to write a novel, hahaha.

but yes. Good stuff. (: And I am so glad you are a Twilight hater! (was reading your blog, haha.)

hmm... was the green haired dude with the mohawk, Andy? Was he? Hmm, much to think about...Cant wait for an update! XD~

Wow, that is horrible luck. But funny! Update soon! ^^

Every chapter you write is badass, so you've got nothing to worry about. Love this!

P.S. I did notice that you named two people Ricky, and I thought it humorous and realistic. Lawl.

*can't stop laughing* Oh poor Murphy XD She can never catch a break (kehkehkeh puns X3)

I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that that's Andy? Or at least I hope it is because he's freaking hilarious, I mean buzzer on the hand? Genius Xp Even though it did cause Murphy to go blind in one eye and to break an arm...still awesome!

I also loved her ramblings, it shows how oblivious she is to everything else whenever she's freaking out Xp

Can't wait for more! And thanks about my username ^-^

~Amorelle

This could be a good story if it wasn't so long-winded.

Hmm interesting...he sure sounds like a character.
and I play tennis too. except I'm right-handed, so I play with my right-hand...but yeah, I have tennis conditioning/camps this summer too...haha, so looking forward to that.

Anyways, nice chapter and update soon!

oh wow oh wow oh wow... wow... sigh...

can't believe this is the first chapter
my hand was already itching and automatically going down to the next button.

so that means please continue!
This should be really interesting, actually it was kind of sad with her life stories. I want to know what else, and who this Andy is.

I hope she can break the 'curse' or the family tradition lol. Perhaps it was all a psychology thing. come back with more!