This was pretty awesome at camp. I didn't realize you had written the bulk of it. It translated to the stage perfectly :]

That was so cute. I love the dialouge (?) between the brothers. Great story!

Lol! I love it! Your humor is witty and the lines are succinct. I love the bear fight/sustenance bit, and the ending line is great. I'd love to see this actually played out, I bet it would be hilarious. Good show! You should try more Brothers Grimm scripts.

I don't know anything about writing scripts so I can't really give any meaningful critique, although if you'd like any critical points, somewhere you have "of who" written where grammatically it's "of whom," but it's dialogue so the rules of grammar are generally suspended.

Kudos and keep writing

Angel:

Absolutely wonderful script! I was impressed right off at the fact that you wrote your play like an ACTUAL script with correct stage-words and cues. Secondly, the humor worked for the play and if I was laughing reading it ("no bear fight"--"he's a young boy, he wouldn't know that word"...pardon my paraphrasing) I'm certain I would have laughed watching it. You have a talent in playwriting and I seriously suggest investing in a program like "Final Draft" (although whatever you wrote this on obviously worked, too) and perhaps attending that camp again :)

Good job!
-Shadow