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| Isca 6/27/09 . chapter 1
In regards to the format, I think the poem would look better if you kept the stanzas short-the first five stanzas are fine, but the last one looks a bit out-of-place.
"We are splintered." The word 'splintered' connotes a very powerful sense of pain here-the speaker suggests that two souls are 'ripped apart' from each other. Obviously, the speaker feels as though she's internally damaged and broken.
Keep up the good work. (: