|Reviews for your new address|
| Isca 7/1/09 . chapter 1
"I mim the distance between us." I'm a sucker for Vaudevillian subtleties. The word 'mime' is so provocative here-it's almost daunting. Lovely opening line. :)
I really liked that the speaker felt uncomfortable sleeping with someone else in their bed. Even if nothing sexual was going on, the speaker felt like being that close to someone at night was just asking for trouble. That was a nice glimpse into the speaker's thoughts.
The 'blue orchids' line was phenomenal-such marvelous imagery!
| A.F Lanley 6/29/09 . chapter 1
Love this poem- beautiful, and simple and complex at the same time.
| sharks don't sleep 6/26/09 . chapter 1
Basically, I think this is beautiful and I love that "conniving" is used and how unconventional the structure of "how unused I was to company" is (had to read it a few times because it seems to wrong when it isn't).
To be honest, the only thing that bothered me was "freakishness" and it actually almost ruined the piece for me. I'd love to know why you used that over something else...