hey, the um sequel... jessie isn't someone they knew before becks' death right? will bernie be in it?

i like the epilogue. i was wondering how you were going to do it. i felt that if you switched to 1st person with jonah as the narrator, it would be kinda incongruent. i was actually expecting a 3rd person narrative detailing either their discovery of her passing or her funeral. but this is nice. it's unique, and it completes her bucket list, and it allows for jonah's 1st person view WITHOUT the incongruence.

ohgosh this is unbelievably beautiful. the way you've written her journey towards death and all her resulting ruminations. the part where her body was breaking down and she kept mentioning the IV and her weak body and even brought up the smell... that was heartbreaking. even more so because i had a relative live his last days in my house and i know how true what she (YOU) wrote is. and i really love her friendship with bernie. she loves him and it shows, but it also shows that their love is purely platonic.

ohgosh. the ending... it's indescribable. i mean, it's not even the END yet, but we know her death is just drawing closer and closer and she's really wrapping things up. especially with the letters. gosh, even may gets one.

ohmygawd i cried AGAIN! this is definitely going on my top fave stories list on my profile bio. this chapter is really good. she's sorta comatose but she can hear everything. and it's pretty obvious who's saying what cos you ensure that there's only 2 people at any one time and they say each other's names periodically. fantastic job/

when she reconciled with her dad and he called her baby girl... i cried. again.

omg this chapter made me CRYYYY. it's like... the first time he fails her! and yet she fails him too cos she's so scared of hurting him, she hurts him anyway.

wow. this thing about the monster is INTENSE. and i didnt realise that whatever happened in her brain could actually change her PERSONALITY.

i think the way you start and end with her inner thoughts is really good. very poignant.

hahaha i LOVE bernie! he's so amazing. he lost his sister but he's this amazing, cheery person. lighthearted, but he can be perfectly serious like when it comes to death or defending becks from unwanted advances.

wonder what happened in the past... what with the mention of lies and truth and whatnot... guess i'll just have to read on, huh? :)

whoo! if the summary wasn't already interesting, this first chapter sure has me hooked! xD she's so ocd it's funny. did you research it? there are no inconsistencies at all! :)

Wow. Ive been reading this story for awhile. I still say, its a great story, NEEDS to be published and is absolutely wonderful.

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For the past three chapters, I have just been bawling my eyes out! This is honestly the best fictionpress story I have read.

It's funny, sad, touching, heart-warming.. just, everything. I really hope you publish this into a book or something. I'd love to see the movie for this :D

Hey, the reviews captured my attention but i really haven't reAD it yet. i'll read it some time later. haha.