|Reviews for Jehb Razalas Ek Salazar|
| Frosthold 6/27/09 . chapter 1
Woah, cool ending! I love role reversal and you did it really well. Anyways, this story was a bit confusing to read. There are a myriad of flashbacks; a good thing except that there is no way of delineating them from the rest of the text. Also, there were countless grammatical errors. I won't go so far as to point them out, but I think that with a good read through you should be able to spot them. Another thing is that you talk about how the twins (identical I assume. You should put that into the story.) were pitted against each other, but you don't say how. It might be interesting to see an example, especially the instance that caused them to form the truce. All in all, a very intriguing read.
| CeruleanSparrow 6/26/09 . chapter 1
Short and well-written. Well done.