Saw your advert on SkoW and thought I'd check it out.

Totally sucks she can't drive the mustang. I'd be mad! Really solid chapter. It is fantastic for your first story. I know it can be a bit unnerving posting your work for the first time. I like the characters and it's shaping up to be the perfect cliche. I have a soft spot for the best friend/protector turned love cliches. The only thing that I would probably change about this is that you give too much backstory in the first chapter. I would probably stick to one short story; maybe two and then weave the others in as you go. Minds tend to wander with multiple flashbacks at once. But like I said, wonderful first chapter!

Cassandra

an interesting first chapter

You know, You've done a good job =)

I saw your plug on SKoW, and decided to give it a go - i know it can be really demoralising when no one reviews!


I think the story is cool, and you're a brill writer.
There's not much to criticise - maybe a little more description of the characters??

Not sure, i'm not good at reviews!
Well anyway,
keep going, cause you're awesome, and i think this will turn out brilliant.

Aurora x

Wow, for a first story this is really good, really hits the cliche mark :)

I like your style of writing, there seems something very original about it but I dunno what it is :/

Update soon pleases :)