So, fp wouldn't let me put up another review because I'd already reviewed on this chapter, so I had to do it anonymously. Because this is a chapter that I have to review!

I loved it, to put it quite simply. I like how you made the dream a part of a bigger chapter, and how the conversation with Bryant goes. (And we finally learn her name! :D) But I feel bad for Shina :/ I always hate that, when you're so sure that you have it right and it turns out that everything your friends have been trying to warn you about is true, and you end up wondering why you didn't listen to them in the first place.

The strangest topic of conversation... hm... well, I can honestly say that I can't answer this question. With friends like mine, it's pretty much impossible XD I love them and all, but we'll talk about the weirdest, most random things.

And about Bryant... well, I like him, but it seems to me that the more that we get to know him in the story, the more I seem to not like him quite as much. Does that make sense? I mean, I don't hate him or anything, he just doesn't seem as great. I don't know... But you don't need to change him. Not everyone in life is a hundred percent likable. Even the best people have their flaws that sort of make you want to strangle them :) Besides, he's not that bad or anything.

Anyway, great chapter! I can't wait to read more! :) And Merry Christmas!

Maria

that is beautiful. that's the only way i can describe it! it's . . .nothing short of amazing i'll tell you that, so much detail . . .anyway, please review :)

Hi! Happy Christmas!

I don't think I ever told you. Your poetic words completely wisk my breath away. I'm not kidding you. No way.

It's almost scary, you know? The way you're able to put together words and they sound so beautiful!

Fav: "your metaphorical rainbow gasoline-puddles on my asphalt", "shooting stars being just beautiful tragedies (,) staining the heavens with suicides"

I'd love to be Sherlock Holmes. I love that book! But... unfortueately, I don't know your narrative's name.. .:( sorry.

BUT! I like my own name and I wouldn't change it.

Update!

I loved your last sentence, "I wake up. I wake up cold. I wake up cold and alone. I wake up cold and alone and aching" too!

Hello! I loved both chapters! They were amazing as always :) And idk what her name is going to be. I am thinking something different and unique, because that is her personality. I like that her name means 'light,' its really cool :) Cant wait for the update!

Ahh, enchanting. I do so love your writing style. :) And I am absolutely emamoured by astronomy.

Cassandra, Phaedra, Phoebe? I think Cassandra's my favourite out of those. And I'm kind of taking a break from reading Racine's "Phaedra" right now, but that's a pretty name, too!

I absolutely hate my English name. And would much prefer something like Vienna or Anne or Lily. Eh. :)

Phos,Greek for light,which I can only conclude means her name should be...Phoebe? Which is a fairly decent name although nothing I'd ever expect her to be called. Really,I could never find a name that would even begin to describe her or suit her. My name...well I'm not really sure what my name is.I'm called one thing but I know my name is something else. Both of them don't quite suit me although I wouldn't imagine any other names. Because of all the names I admire,none are for me.

As it's the first time I've ever reviewed your story, my review will probably be quite lengthy. First of all,I can't even begin to describe how much the character and I have in common. From the strict,all-business father to the girly little sister and all the stranger,her relationship with Bryant. Well,currently I have a crush on...someone and he does in fact remind me of Peter Pan with his boyish smile and twinkling brown 's been two years already and I've trying to will the crush away as any chance of something good coming out of it is very slim,but just like with her,he's really all I can think about. The simple glances,the heart-fluttering smiles,and god,I just wish they wouldn't affect me so much. I'm tired of liking(loving?)him but I'm finding that to be impossible. The way she feels is the only way I can describe how I feel.

But it's not just that that connects me to her. Almost every thought is something that stirs my heart. Because I can desperately relate to her love of writing, her want(need?)to be that girl,those girls. And the poetic words weave themselves into my mind,driving me into thinking the exact same things. Because I am thinking the exact same things. And I can feel that you're incorporating much if not all of yourself into this story because I know when I throw my heart and soul into something, sometimes it comes out as beautiful as your story. How else would every word hold so much power if it didn't come from your heart,your thinking?

Point is, your writing is amazing,fantastic,gorgeous, and just...heart-warming. I wish I could write more but I really can't put much more of how I feel into words. Keep up the good work!

P.S. I am in fact Wendy(they call me)and I'm hoping that he's my Peter.

i really like this story! i love the way you put little...rants if thats what they are in the middle of the story. a lot of them are actually things i have thought...or something like that and were strangely close to what i thought. also the little rant on love was SO touching and i never really thought of love that way but i did i just couldnt describe it. anyway love the story love you love the characters, keep it up! cant wait till the next one!

Shame on you for taking so long, and for having such a short chapter.

This was beautiful, but I’m curious about who the boy with the eyelashes is. Or is it a dream seeing as she wakes up cold and alone? I’m going to have to read the last couple of chapters again as I think there’s been moments like this before, but I can’t place them.

I loved the allusions to childhood: the having faith in friction, and the attitude to gravity. Starlight being cold enough to make your teeth ache. I love the way you use such fantastic ideas to describe such real things. I could wrap myself up in your prose and drown. Really.

I’m going for Phoebe because I’m pretty sure Phoebus is the guy with the sun chariot. I kind of like her not having a name actually. I’d like you to not use it until right at the end at least. My name is ok. The meaning (bee) isn’t so romantic and imagination provoking, and the history is quite dry because the Puritan’s wheeled it out a lot. I like the sound of it though. Strong and well earthed. My surname is funky though – if you stretch it enough in the right light you can get Arthurian connections out of it. I’m not sure I’d change my first name. I do like Selene though.

I couldn't find the name...so I'm not sure what my answer is for the first question. What would I name her? ...really I'm not sure...I feel her name should be something simple, not too unique, but still something that stands out subtly (Er...I don't think there is a description that fits this xD)

My name is ok I guess, it's pretty common, but I like to think of it as a classic name (pretty vague since I'm not giving it out lol)

I'm not sure I would change my first name. I've grown with it, but I would change my middle name to be something I think describes me.

I loved this chapter ) I could picture everything in my head as though it was real, and although it's just a simple scene, your words made it...wow I'm at a loss for words...haha, now you know it was good!

i looked it up and it gave me a bunch.

the ones i thought maybe were elena, nora and zanthe. but i don't really have a clue haha.

i wouldn't know what to name her; thats a pretty tough job you have there. the character sort of seems too vast to be restricted by a name. i guess we're all kind of hoping you'd pick ours. hahaha.

i don't mind my name. when i was little, i used to hate it, and would only respond to my middle name, kate (or katie), which i liked a lot better. but now it just seems your name is your name, and it doesn't define you (i used to think my name was dorky, haha) because there are so many people out there with the same one, and we're all entirely different.

i do still cringe when my mother calls my full name, though.

hahaha.

great chapter. sorry to hear that school is taking over your life. it gets like that, though. it's amazing to see it hasn't faultered your writing, one bit.

:)

oh my lordy. ther are an awful lot of greek names meaning light. but i'll go with the obvious. helen? or one of its derivatives? helen sounds kind of boring, but i guess we don't actually choose our own names to fit, so...

this chapter was so beautiful. you must be sick of hearing that for all your chapters, but man, this one was super beautiful. the bruised sky, the search for words, the need for him to say something comforting , teh last line... sigh... so good!

so glad you updated! :D

Her name... I can't figure it out. When you translate light into Greek it comes out Liat or Lait, which would be cool names, but I've never heard it before. A baby girl name is Eleni or Helen, but I doubt it's Helen. So Eleni I bet.

What would I name her? I would name her Ailey or Evenlyn.

I personally love my name. It's unique and if I do happen to meet someone with my name they're always male, but I like it as a girl's name. If I were to change it I'd go with my middle name, Talisa. My last name I'm not a fan of, too generic.

Your story is great. I cannot wait to find out what her name actually is.

George

That was a great chapter! I have absolutely no idea about any of those questions really. Sorry, school has fried my brain right now. lol. I hope you can continue again soon!

LUCY! Her name is Lucy!

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I think. Well, I hope. I'm so sorry haven't reviewed lately-midterms. :P But I finished today-on my birthday! Yay! Ick, that all rhymed. Ha. But all of you chapters were fantastic, as usual. You are a very hard person to give criticism-even constructive-to. Great job!

-Paris

P.S. Yeah, I love my name. It's unusual, kinda pretty, and has some strong meaning behind it. Plus, my father gave it to me-something to remember him by.

:)

wow, this chapter was just awesome!

it's really poetic and it's a nice change to all the other stories here on fp (although i like most of them as well :-) )

for her name, i would say its aurora, but it means dawn, which is some sort of light ;-)

but i looked it up and google said phos (greek word for light) but i'm not sure it's an actual name

as for my name: it's swedish and means beautiful victress or victorious beauty i'm not sure, now it's your turn to find out, hehe