|Reviews for Splitting the Second|
| Isca 7/2/09 . chapter 1
"I need change." Whoa! The tone of this line is perfect. The beginning of the poem is manic, rushed, and frenzied, but this little line immediately allows the reader to catch a glimpse of the speaker's true nature. This poem, in its words and form, is kind of insane (and I mean that in a good way). It's this insanity that makes the angst so much more profound. Keep up the good work. :)
| Pathway 6/28/09 . chapter 1
fantastically frenetic, great descriptions (cocktail-glass-antiheroes). Love it.
| fictionalboyfriend 6/27/09 . chapter 1
Whew. This poem is a little bit exhausting. You weren't lying about 'manic'.
| rage of aquarius 6/27/09 . chapter 1
My favorite lines:
c)loud, a crow(d)
star shaped hearts. heart
shaped stars; stare shaped scars
I also think that "lowercase confessions to/childhood friends" is clever, and your manipulation of punctuation is amazing. The "inhale" ... "exhale" thing is breathtaking, too (no pun intended). I'm all admiration. This should be published.