It was vague and mysterious. I liked the vibe it gave off while reading. Good job.

I liked this, the way you kind of made it seem like the reader was an intruder in this scene in a good effect. I must say, Ottavio sounds like a pretty irritating person, but I suppose that works. I like the characters and the way they interact; it makes me want to know more about them. Nice work.
~403F

Very nice. Clever. Had to read back after the end to really appreciate it. Vauge and awesome, just the way I like it!