I actually really like this. I prefer poems that rhyme and have a nice spoken word quality over free style forms. Anyhow the beginning was very good, when you got to "but I shan't do you harm" the rhythm changed up and I wasn't able to follow it anymore. Then you switched back to your original cadence again at the line " I'll be your puppet..." and it was all good again. So if you ever revise this poem, my suggestion would be to work on that one stanza that is out of sync. The line "In this world this we live in you are" doesn't make sense, but I'm guessing it is just a late-night typo. Anyhow I really did enjoy this, and I think with a little revising you could be ready to perform at a poetry slam!