Alright, this is a great idea for a story. I love the writing and dilogue. I'm really surprised that she's not mean, not snapping at people, I would have been in a horrible mood. She sounds tired and careless. Your power is with words, you use them to the best they can be used. Update Soon!

Write more! I like stories that came from dreams, where human's wildest imagination is incurred.

I like it! Write more! :)

I can only wonder how everything will turn out, as a preface it achieves the goal of grabbing the reader's attention. I'm very interested to see how this story will turn out.