|Reviews for California Code Candy|
| Helen C 8/14/11 . chapter 5
YOU NEED TO UPDATE THIS AWESOME STORY!. :)
| bumblevee 11/4/09 . chapter 5
This is a really good story, and you have no grammar mistakes as far as I can tell. Didn't you say you'll finish this by the end of summer vacation? Guess what? You're 2 months late! *Poke* Update *Poke* Update
| Lunaira 7/23/09 . chapter 5
I liked the omake. OwO I didn't notice the note you wrote. D; -[looks back]- Oh, it was just if you thought you should write an omake. _; Well, I liked it, so whatever. XP I'll wait patiently for your next update
| L.A. Clearwater 7/18/09 . chapter 2
I love Luke and Machiko...they make a good story...hope to be as good as you are...anyway,(if you just want to)could you review mine? I seriously need criticisms so I can fix mine.
| MistyRose14 7/13/09 . chapter 4
ugh...don't remind me about insanely long flights XD. eight hours was enough for me last month - you get loopy precisely after the half-way point. back to the topic, though! another exceptional update, where things are really getting into motion. i think it's amazing that Machiko has all of these opportunities lining up for her, and i'm curious to see how Luke is going to open up to her in the future. it makes for an intriguing set up, that's for certain.
oh and about the hits you mentioned in the author's note...i think that you can't really compare and ficpress. is definitely more reader orientated, while as you'll notice here, most people are only concerned about posting their work. it makes for a shortage of readers unfortunately. but a word of advice - maybe you could recruit your devoted fans over here (it's worked for me in the past)? they don't have to log in to leave a review, that's for sure. bonne chance et à plus!
| MistyRose14 7/11/09 . chapter 3
hello hello. another nice chapter. well...not exactly pleasant for Machiko, but you understand. so, i'm glad you're having fun with all of the updates and creating your character message (it's nice to have a bit of fun motivation XD). but...as i read at the ending of your chapter in the author's note, i just wanted to add that you don't have to feel obligated to 'mimic' any shoujo. that would be a little fake, and i think it's more intriguing when you write it the way you truly want it, instead of rigidly trying to impress one audience. that's just my opinion, so go for whatever works for you. donc, je vais me coucher, à demain.
| Corselli 7/11/09 . chapter 4
Like it! Love it! I may make a Manga of it D
| L.A. Clearwater 7/10/09 . chapter 1
You're going to kill me with envy...I LOVE California Code Candy!(*sigh* my story isn't as good as yours!)
| Lunaira 7/8/09 . chapter 4
I loved this chapter, too! I especially like how you wrote the little things - like Machiko trying to wake Leo up - and I like the way you write songs, too. ] You're right, though: FP has a much smaller population than FFN. Even so, I'm glad you made an account on this site, because if you hadn't, then I never would have gotten to read this amazing story! XD I'll wait patiently for your next update
| cluelessromantic 7/8/09 . chapter 4
I really like Luke's character. He seems so sweet, I hope he opens up more to Machiko.
| cluelessromantic 7/8/09 . chapter 3
Ohh I like this. It's very cool and I would totally buy this manga. I feel bad for Machiko, on top of her harsh dad, it was low of her friend going to the media like that.
| Lunaira 7/5/09 . chapter 3
This is such an original story, honestly! I adore Machiko's character - especially how she's a half - and I like how you're sticking to English for the story; it helps people like me, who can't remember every Japanese word they've heard. XD I also love how easy this is to read: there's very few errors - there's only a 1% margin, if that - and your vocabulary is clear and advanced; it makes me wonder how old you are. Lolz.
I'll wait patiently for your next update
| MistyRose14 7/3/09 . chapter 2
bon, c'est marrant, ça XD. oh là là - je kiffe trop...
i truly enjoy all of the energy that you pumped into the concert experience. even though all of the members of the group seemed a little goofy at first, they sure seem to have the ritual of performing down perfectly. oh - and the titles working together to spell the secret message is a really cute idea :).
donc, je vais le mettre sur mes préférés (i will be putting this on favorites) et pour 'shoujo star', si c'est possible (and in my community, if that's okay) ! continue, s.v.p!
| MistyRose14 7/3/09 . chapter 1
coucou! ça va bien, j'espère!
first of all, i'd like to compliment you on the tone of your story - it's highly realistic, which is really good for a shoujo, so it doesn't get muddled and boring (and fangirlly, as we all hate it XD). personally, i appreciate the fact that you're actually a student of the language and have a great amount of knowledge about the country of Japan that is extremely evident in this chapter :). i also enjoyed the explained terms at the bottom . in my opinnion, the fact that you separate the Japanese and English forms is helpful for establishing the characters' identities.
and, just for a random thought - i think that Machiko would probably do a thin coat of foundation, a light powder, a bit of mascara, and lip gloss (hehe, i'm into makeup - as long as it's natural ). i think that her character is really natural and intellectual...a person that we'll definitely cheer for throughout this adventure!
c'était vraiment tranquille - et bon travail!
| Dawns Eyes 6/30/09 . chapter 1
XD Yay! Oh, I wish this were a real manga lol. I'd love to see the expressions on they're faces and such. Maybe you can sell it to a manga-ko or something... make a lot of munneh X3 I love Luke, really do. I could probably talk my friend Ai-chan into drawing pics of your chars, if ya want. She's pretty good. Poor Machiko, though. Only children in Japan get so much pressure to do good. And wow, this has got to be on of the longest reviews I've ever written lol Waiting patiently for the next chapter