This is really good! Keep writing :)

This is a really great prelude, I think! I'm already interested to see where things go. I really liked your writing, it was smooth and easy to read/follow, kind of melodic (if that makes any sense). Anyway, I'm going to keep reading!

wow, this is so interesting :)
i'm captivated.
i'll definitely be reading more once i've had a bit of sleep lol.
i envy your creativity. :P

I really liked your new prelude. It hold a lot more mystery and element to the story (but your previous one wasn't crap.)
And I feel so sorry for the dad. i just imagine how much pain he had to go through.

I like the story so far it really grabs my attention Im really wondering were this will lead to so don't stop the magic

I like the sort of fairy tale feel from your prelude, and your tale just exudes the whole fantasy and magic element of storytelling.
However, I think, in your prelude, it would have been better if you revealed some of the plot later on in the story rather than right away, and sort of draw it out with some 'meat' or details.
'Secunda Ogletree was ninety-five years old, but looked like she was twenty-one' was a line I think you could have excluded and sort of just 'showed' instead of telling it.
Overall, it was good reading it, but the first chapter would be more interesting than the prelude.