"White fills in the blanks." Although I like this line, I think it's a bit redundant. The 'blanks' would be 'white' anyway, and thus, wouldn't need to be 'filled' with more nothingness. But, it did remind me of the 'tabula rasa' theory, so that's a bonus.

"When did I stop trying?" Good. The tone of this line is very raw and honest. The speaker clearly doesn't remember 'giving up' and is only now realising that they haven't been 'trying' hard enough lately.

"Relentless." Nice word choice. It's very powerful. The fact that Day and Night are battling for Light is rather epic and profound.

Keep up the good work. :)

"The lakes of my childhood burned." Wow. This line is full of vibrant imagery and powerful emotions.

"Safety has become selective." The tone of this line is very striking.

"The ascension from here is steep." This final line is so sorrowful. It sounds like the speaker hopes to die in her sleep--knowing that the 'steps' towards Heaven are 'steep.'

Keep up the good work. :)

First off instead of the x you can actually use enter+shift to put a single space between the lines.

Word choice: 'Holes torn in rain,' I am not sure about that line, but in the same instance it impresses me. I also liked that you used rarely used words with more so simple words. That gave the poem a good feel to it.

Stanza one:
(Cause I dont know what else to depth for it?? XD)
Anyway, I like all the reference to time in this stanza because it shows the speakers anxiety with time. It made me think of alzhiemers when you said the childhood summers burned. All the talk to time and then memories were making me think the speaker was losing their mind and obviously memories.

Punctuation: Now, I am not a fan of punctuation at the end of every line. However, with the time section the abrupt stops worked. One does not need to put a stop at the end of every line because the lines read together if there is no pucntuation.

Enjoyment: Overall I liked the poem, but the second two stanzas seemed to lack a little of the spark the first one had. I think the second two talked about the word grass a bit too much. It seemed very repeated.

good work
Areku