Again, lovely job. I particularly like your depiction of Jesus: not particularly handsome and annoyed when the Pharisees interrupt his drawing time. Very personable, very likable. The only thing I'd recommend is working with the wording of the "let he who is without sin cast the first stone" phrase. It's a bit awkward, I think in part because the perspective is tweaked in the middle of the sentence, from the direct "you" to the indirect "him." If the perspective is kept consistent, I think it would read better. Other than that, though, it's an absolutely wonderful take on this story.

I disagree with Chip. I think you did a good job of writing the original story with your own flair. I could picture it quite clearly, which I couldn't do in the Bible version, and yet you kept the original meaning of the story. Some of your own aspects of it--Jesus had more of a personality than is normally shown, and it made it seem less of a merciful thing than simply...just reacting. My only comment, though, is maybe giving more historical information--what did the Pharisees wear? Was this a common occurence? Just thoughts.^^ But awesome, awesome job!!

I wonder what a low rumble of disgust sounds like. But I digress. It seems too much taken from the original text - it doesn't seem like much your story except some added insults and effects from the croud. Who is this woman? This pharisee? Do they have names? Stories? Imagine what it is like being thrust from the fleeting pleasures of guilty escapism into a bloodthirsty mob flauting your wretchedness - The original text (and yours) gives her one line. Can you beat that? Is this a story of a clever way Jesus escaped another trap or is it a story of a woman whose guilt is exposed in the most dramatic fashion, but who is given a single chance to change her life? Tell me that story.