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Reviews For: Jungle Buddies
LYCC 2009-08-10 . chapter 1
I like it. :) Really nice story you've written, but the ending could have been better.
surroundedANDalone 2009-08-07 . chapter 1
Short and simple, with the complex undertones of war. Nicely done. :)
Lady Livia 2009-07-22 . chapter 1
Is this going to be continued?
...the dead sniper bleeding everywhere gave me images of the skinned guys from the Predator movies.. :)
amourningmeet 2009-07-10 . chapter 1
This is very short, and usually people are like yelling at me because, I don't put much detail and all that crap, but anyway, I got the idea. I'm sort of confused with these soilders and blah, but that's probably just me not knowing all this Army stuff. Aha.
East-0f-Eden 2009-07-08 . chapter 1
that's very awe inspiring. however, i think you could make it into a better more detailed story. you just need to add more description. i like the short sentences. you're style reminds me a tiny bit of Catch-22 mixed with SlaughterHouse 13. You just need to be more in depth. Those are great books for inspiration for your story. they're great books period.
Sergeant Rock 2009-07-08 . chapter 1
This was an interesting piece. My guess of the war is either Vietnam or Korea.
LostInMe 2009-07-05 . chapter 1
At last, the long-awaited "Jungle Buddies"! I thought it would be a poem, so it was a nice surprise to find a short story. Anyway, aww! I'm not sure if that's the exact reaction you're going for, but it's so cute! (I just found one mistake - the last sentence is a run-on.)
Isca 2009-07-05 . chapter 1
The "I killed his mother" line was such a nice plot twist. I also like that Dick asked the officer if they would all 'understand' that it had been an accident. It's crazy to think that the kid takes a candy bar from the man who shot his mother. That's both shocking and profound. Keep up the good work. :)
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