 -ennui.deity 2009-07-05 . chapter 1First of all: I LOVE JAMES ADAMS. Thanks for making this story for me. :]
I liked it. Although... (the end part was romantic) the whole crying part of me at the end kinda threw me off track. I mean, I would've kissed him, rather than cry in front of him.
It would've been better if you just said I hyperventilated or something. The whole crying part was really just kinda off.
But... anyway! I like it! Nice job.
Thanks!
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