I think you made wonderful word choices. The language just flows off the page. And I absolutely loved the opening to this story. Very insightful. However, to be honest, I wasn't quite clear with what happened in the rest of this story (sorry), but I enjoyed reading it simply for the beauty of the way you wove the words together.

Hmm, a very interesting concept behind this - clever take on the prompt too!

I think a bit more of an introduction would've been helpful, because I got kind of confused at times. The start, while it was a clever way to begin and really caught my attention, kind of threw me because judging by it, I assumed the characters would be birds, but then they turned out to be humans instad.
This wasn't such a bad thing though, since you tied it in with the next scene. The names of the characters also made me think of birds for some reason, so maybe there was a tie between the characters and the bird, like some form of sybolism that I missed?

I'm very intrigued as to the background behind these characters; they seem very interesting - I'd love to know why they were fighting in the first place too! This piece definitely has the premises to be extended into a longer story, if you ever chose to continue with the plot.

Were you doing a kind of Jekyll/Hyde thing with the changing spelling of Taka and Teaka? Or were they two completely different characters?

The dialogue felt wonderfully real, and some of the lines really got me thinking. You often portrayed that feeling of bitterness really well.

I'm interested by Pidge hearing what was written in italics at the end, and no one else; I really hope you do decide to extend this!

Sorry about the possibly rambly and nonsensical review; if you need me to translate one of my jumbled thoughts into normal english (rather than some random half sentence, which is what I tend to do) for you (just about everyone does xD) feel free to pm me.
I really did enjoy your story, your writing is great.
Goodluck for WCC!

I hate to say this but I had a really hard time following your story. Are they birds or humans? The beginning I got the distinct impression that they were birds, especially since your main character is named Pidge. The beginning section of dialogue was a bit confusing; I think because it was all dialogue and no detail, I had a hard time understanding where the characters were, and what they were really doing.

In terms of structure it improved toward the middle when they started fighting. You started off with your character written as Taka, and then it switched to Teaka. Are they the same person? Or two different people? I wasn’t sure. I’m sorry to say it as well but I was confused at the end too. The dialogue makes sense, but I suppose I’m wonder what is the motivation the characters have for fighting like this. I felt like Kness was some sort of teacher, instructing Pidge, and Taka/Teaka was also a student, who went bad. Good writing overall, keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.