aww, what a sweet poem! I came upon this when looking through my own poety (you favorited one, Just Like Second Hand Smoke) for some inspiration for a new story I'm doing (The # Diaries) and found your review and decided that I'd come back and return the favor even though it's been like a good 7 months.

Well, I'm glad that I did come back because I actually really like this poem and the sweet pureness there is to it. No confusing lines about elephants and rabbits; just fireworks and lips.

Great job on the poem ;)

Kattie

eh, mine sucked.

but hey, thanks for the well-wishing anyway.
:)

as for the piece,
i loved the play on that old saying.
very quirky.

oo i love this. i may not be the most original idea, but it's lovely all the same. and just in time for fourth of july. i had the same sort of thing happen to me on that particualar day. =]
nicely done, keep writing!

I like the beggining, when you had bold and italics and stuff. It gave the poem a feeling other poems don't get without that extra effect. But then you stopped, and it kind of wasn't as fun anymore. Although I did like it all-together, I think you should have kept up with that. Also, I think (you & i danced in the purple, blue, green haze, the best dance of my life.) is great, but it ruins the flow. Maybe something else should have come before that... yes... well anywho, it still gave me the feeling of a really good poem, and it had a song in it I think. So good job, keep up the good work.

Aw. Very good.