Ok, appariently my other review wasn't good enough for a perfectionist like you. So now, I'm going to ramble on and on about what I like until I run out of characters.

The first thing that really sucked me into the story was when you talked about the wedding that i girl wished she could have had. With the tulle dress and big white chapter. I couldn't help but wish that she had gotten her six kids and dog.

I love that they had their own hill! How many people really have one of those. LOVE IT!

I liked it when you described the way that the new girlfriend looked. How she was gorgeous and perfect. And then you went and picked away at the beauty until all you could see was a monster. AND YOU USED THE WORD HARLET! OMG, I love you.

I love that you made it seem like the man was overcome with love and that he couldn't see past the boyfriend stealing harlot's outside beauty. That was wonderful.

How she just sat outside and picked at the grass. I can't tell you how much I loved that she did that. I didn't that when that stupid bastard of an ex-boyfriend left me. :)

And the asymmetrical bob was perfect. I love those. I had one a while ago. And the fact that she was trying to block him from her vision, and how it didn't work. Perfection.

Personally, I think he doesn't know what the word *guilt* means. I think that he is just consumed in his world and that he doesn't even let her crawl into his mind anymore. I believe he has truley forgotten about her. :'(

The rain, awesome. I love your stories when they imncorporate rain. It's awesome. You really put a lot of emotion into them. Well, you put emotion into all your stories but that is besides the point.

How she got on a bus to escape from the town and hopefully from the memories of him. Perfect. Thank goodness she had the money.

And then the girl was her sister. Hold on! How could a person do that her own flesh and blood sibling. She's a complete **. Seriously.

Well, didn't exactly run out of characters but I'm in the 70's now. lol. longest review ever.

- Slapshot

You are simply amazing Bubbles. There were only slight detail changes but I could barely register that this was also a Twilight fic. You are AWESOME! I love this story. TTYN (talk to you now) mainly because I am at the moment.

LOL, see you at work.

You are the Hydie to my Gertrude.

- Slapshot

wow... i would reveiw on fan fic and this but if there are originals out there i like to do them more. plus i thought u would appreciate it more on your original. by the way, you were right, the original is better. i don't know why, i think it's the descriptions and it seems to be more from the heart than the one on ff. oh, i read that one first and thanks for directing me here it was well worth my time. also, would you consider continuing this story or is it just a short one? oops sorry i forgot you can't answer anonymous reveiws. if you're gonna continue either one would you pls pm me on ff(happy-gerbil-faced-optimism). thankyou for sharing your wonderful story and listening/reading my prattling review. i look forward to reading more.