Interesting concept. They rhyming is a little forced for me, but adds to the immediacy of poem. Nicely done.

The rhyme scheme's a bit erratic, but the message is great - sad and true. Very well thought-out.

I really liked this... especially the last line. It seemed to wrap it all up nicely and add even more depth.

I like the concept behind it, and the ending lines are great.

nice...well - that can be disputed due to the theme
but i liked - again, see above - it.

"Remembering the forgot." The word 'forgot' should probably be 'forgotten' here.

The message is powerful, but to be honest, I found the rhyme scheme to be a little bit distracting--you did a good job of connecting everything while still keeping the form, but personally, I think the piece would flow better if every other line rhymed or something like that.

I liked all of the lines that mentioned 'thougts' or 'dreams.' They were vivid and thought-provoking.

Keep up the good work. :)