I read the original, and I love the rewrite. Your writing is getting better all the time. How much you've learned realy shows. Keep up the good work.

(would login but I'm having issues) Anyways I can deffinantly see a growth in your writing and I'm loving the longer chapters! I look forward to more updates and seeing the development of the new characters you've introduced =D Good work so far

She loses doesn't she? I think the father of her baby is Adam... I mean he has obviously been in love with her since she started the same school... Can't wait to see who wins the race! :D

interesting... can't wait to see what happens, i mean i know what happens in the original but hey you might have changed it up... i don't know...
~silver sky memories~
-ashley-

Love it love it love it! Can't wait for more and to see how everyone reacts to Adam being in the doorway... I wonder how much he heard...

this is a great start,though i got got confused when you were talking about how Ebony was twenty something when she realized that the beatings were not normal. You should fix that part because it confused me, making it seem like it was in the present and not in the future. Now I just hope we actually find out who is the boys father.

I'm reading too, so it's not just the people in your head :)
~ashley~

HMm...I think I beginning this rewritten one