This was very good!

It is short and to the point but has a lot of emotion behind it.

I like these lines,

"You have to pull apart the shards

Of the blackened soul inside her

And her hopeless broken heart."

And the last two as well, a great ending.

Well written!

Wonderful! Rhyming and sentiment both touching. :)

That guy needs a swift kick in the pants. :D

I like how this piece reflects the emotions that (I'm sure) were felt duing the time it was written.

like the short and sweet idea. makes the poem more real because u didnt ramble on forever.

This was packed with emotion and I could understand what was happening even with so few words.

That takes skills.

I get how her sould could be blackened; she has now lost faith in love or has become bitter. Tragic.

Very good!

I love your writing! -

Hope to see more soon!

;D

[peacelove&&guava]

Kayla

So emotive! And definitely to the point. What a horrid guy.

Aw, I didn't think someone broken would have a black soul especially if she wasn't the one at fault.

I think you should try to find another title, despite feeling unable to come up with an original one. It's hard when the piece is short, but I'm sure there's something meaningful you can drag out of it.

I like how it's for someone else. Dedicating poetry is the best. I hope this helps them out.