"Isolated in a forgotten place with no more than pooling mud for company." This line is very heart-breaking. The mud imagery adds such a deep-rooted sense of loneliness to the speaker's isolated life.

"She thinks she's never going to get out." The tone of this line is very raw and powerful--adding so much emotion to the ending of the piece. Keep up the great work. :)

From the first word to the last...wonderfully written! Very descriptive. It sort of reminded me of Cinderella. My favorite lines:


Her long, dark hair was swept up in a messy bun
She didn’t bother with her appearance
There was no one to see her anyway


Well done!

Anna

Dang, I really like your word choice. The imagery is great, I can see everything as you describe it. The meaning comes across just as well--memories and time can be really messy.

I, personally, don't put *'s in between stanzas, but if it's your style, I guess it's cool. I couldn't help but feel a little distracted when just looking at the poem. I understand they're separators, but all it takes, for me, is just a space.

Good job, I think this piece is really great.

"Her long, pale pink dress messed and torn
A trip down memory lane gone wrong"

I loved those lines alot! Very creative! I also liked:

"Her silhouette appeared longer than it really was
All in the fading light
As it bent over the broken boards of the boat"

Great poem!