EXCELLENT STORY!
Oh my gosh that was an intense and deliciously creepy ride! I simply loved it. You have such a powerful and convincing story voice i thought the person was sitting beside me the whole time.
I don't know where to begin to tell you that this is wonderfully written. I mean the imagery is what seals the deal for me. The moon was such an interesting and intelligent character it made me want to close my curtains. I mean the life you breathed into this world was masterfully done and I simply can't believe that it was over when I got to the end.

I love how you showed that the poor thing killed Mary and I was actually saying to myself - 'Don't let the moon catch you out there.'
To make your reader's heart race is a show of one heck of an author...Great job.

I think the pacing was great, the characters - nature were mysterious and brutal in their assault on the guys mind, and the overall piece was fantastic!!
**Stand up to clap**
I am so glad that you came by the bar and gave me such an inspiring and thrilling story to read tonight!! Intense and captivating!!

Momo - Pay it Forward - (If you don't know what that means then please go to the bar and read the rules)

Very nice descriptions. The later parts made me think of an insane asylum everything was so vague, I dunno if that was what you were hoping for. The abstract aspect was very nice, I can't help but think when she said "there is no moon" she meant soemthing more meaningful but I can't quite grasp it. Shame on my college reading skills...

I think I prefer to think of it as a fantasy rather than the ramblings of an insane woman. Seems kinder.

Wow, that was really good. I would love to read more. The only thing is that your sentences are kind of choppy and could be longer. Keep writing.